(My response to the feedback is in speech marks, bold, italic and in blue).
Overall Comments
Thanks for sending the latest batch of work. You have submitted this section ahead of
schedule. I am a little concerned that you are rushing. While you are making more work, you need to spend more time considering the work and developing your ideas and contextual understanding. Returning to remake things might also help you. You’re learning stuff. Processing that learning and applying what you’ve learned it REALLY important. If you feel that you wish you could go back and do something again because you now better understand what is required then do so. Work ought to feed on work and be part of a constant cycle of making and reflection.
I mentioned the following blogpost in an email when you enrolled, but it worth revisiting it, I think: https://www.oca.ac.uk/weareoca/creative-writing/life-level-one/
Looking at the work of other Drawing Two students would also be useful for you as it will give you an indication of what is expected of you at assessment. This link takes you to the work of a recent student of mine who’s also concerned with the domestic: https://
drawing2blog.wordpress.com/
” I hadn’t really thought that I was rushing my work at the time but looking back I can see that it does look that way. I think this is because I have focused on the idea of going for March assessment which I can now isn’t possible without rushing and my work being compromised because of it. I will take the time I need in order to complete the course to the best of my ability and once finished then go for the assessment closest. I will revisit the site suggested, although I already have it’s a good idea to freshen up on things. I will also look at the site suggested of my peer’s blog in order to see what they have accomplished and how they have done so”.
Feedback on assignment
Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Quality of Outcome, Demonstration of
Creativity
You loosened your approach to working high I know isn’t easy for you. The work submitted is more energetic than in the past. The blind drawings build up to be bold visions of their subjects. The large three colour superimposed images works best. It has more control than the large pencil drawing. While it’s good you’re working more freely, keep control of the marks you make. Control should allow you to vary the kind of mark you make. Leaning on, or lifting off the different media will result in different weights of line. At the moment it’s a big one dimensional.
Well done for pushing the link between the blind portraits and Picasso’s work. This could be exploited further. The ‘experiments with mark-making’ section is a bit safe. You need to push yourself to be more experimental in your responses. It’s hard to tell that they weren’t made in a conventional way. The chairs drawing has a good composition though. I like the way if chops up the space of the paper. Think about how the shadow could be employed to work as forcefully as the legs. At the moment the shadows peter out a bit.
I hope you do come back to this. Think about how Matisse worked with VERY long sticks
from his bed.
” I will do more experimentation with varied lines and movements as suggested and revisit this part of section 3 in order to see if I can be a drawing that is less safe and shows my use of elongated pencils. I will edit the shadow regarding the chair drawing so that it matches with the forcefulness of the chair legs. To help me further I will research into Matisse use of very long sticks that he used when he was in bed to see if it inspires and helps my work go further”.
The results of the Drawing Machines are varied. It’s interesting that this work (and the
assignment pieces) sort of obliterate and depth and all (well, nearly all) produce dense
surfaces of marks. I don’t know what that means, but it might be a step forward. Something to think about anyway.
You write well about these drawings and how you’ve overcome technical problems .Perhaps you work best when you aren’t free to do what you like. Working within a restriction might be the way forward… Seriously consider how you could incorporate this kind of work into other things. It might be that you make these and then cut them up and collage them together to make new work, you could also print out the photographs and experiment with them. The emotional response is s strange piece. By using different media on the same drawing it has produce a fragmented collage-like appearance. The exercise is geared to getting ten different drawings but this response is also valid. There collision of media is jarring, but at times (especially bottom left – statements 1 and 2) this works. The conflict in the statements contributes to the image. Most of the image is made up of similar mark (though in deferent media) which flattens the effect a bit.
“I agree that I work better when I am restricted as it allows me some form of control even when trying to work freely, it’s just getting the balance right between working freely with control and not tightening up. I hope to go back and redo this piece using more varied lines to stop the effect on the drawing looking flat”.
The Assignment work is linked – I think – to the machine drawings. The comments about
varying you mark (above) are relevant her. I recommend you experiment with getting loads of different marks out of each media. Think about works like light, soft, hard, fat, quick, slow, side on, pointy, sharp, blunt. Force yourself to twist and turn you arms, wrist, shoulder, elbow, slowly (and quickly) when you drawn .This should price a wider vocabulary of marks. I’d be interested to read about how these reflect the music. Do the lines match melodies? How does rhythm inform your movement? Are the colours selected reflective of something? Are the resulting drawings documentation of a performance? The final piece – the ‘splatter’ portrait, is the beginning pf something else entirely. If you feel you want to pursue it, then do. I suspect you’ll have to make loads of drawings to develop it.
” I will definitely go back and experiment further with my mark making, it may seem obvious but I have never really thought about moving parts of my body in ways to see what I create with my thought process being to just move the media that I was using at the time so it will be interesting to see what this process creates. I will then reflect on the process as suggested. Regarding the portrait I’m not entirely sure whether I wish to pursue this or not, I may create a couple more to see how I feel, which may turn in to many more or non at all”.
In summary, I pleased that you have worked in a more carefree manner. You need to exert more control over the mark-making without tightening up.
Sketchbooks
Demonstration of technical and Visual Skills, Demonstration of Creativity
You’re using these quite freely. Keep filling them with tying that catch your eye, and allow visual ideas to collide and bounce off each other. This might include the work of others (or drawings of the work of others). Try and make visual connections between things as well as ‘answering‘ the exercises. Sketchbooks should become rich and complex and provide you with loads of things to follow up. They aren’t just places to practice stuff.
“I will definitely keep up my use of drawing and creating in my sketchbooks as I feel that it has helped my learning process quite a lot. I will also try to make connection during this process.”
Research
Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis
Well done for looking into some of the artists I suggested. The Lee John Phillips work
seems to have struck a chord. The Parallel Project work you’ve made in response to this is a good start . I hope you keep it up. Once you have completed a drawn catalogue you can think about how to show it. The Vermeer, Hammershoi and Gilman pieces are focussed on biography, but I think it would be useful to think of how they show intimate domestic interiors. Comparing them, one with another would be useful. At the moment this section is a bit too ‘art historical’ for a practicing artist. What can you steal or adapt for your own use? You mention in the Rauschenberg text that you are, to paraphrase, wary of stealing from others for your own work. Don’t be. Rubens stole figures from Michelangleo and much Renaissance art is based on Greek sculpture. Andy Warhol used commercial photographs to make his own work. No-one minds – especially at student level – if you ‘borrow’ from another artist. You’re not passing it off or conning anyone. Look at more contemporary art and see how people re-purpose things all the time.
“When it comes to my research and parallel project Lee John Phillips work has helped to focus my work on my parallel project my only concern is how to connect my parallel project based on this to my critical review, hopefully as I progress I will find a way to do this. I admittedly prefer working on my catalogue as opposed to doing drawing on intimate interiors. I will make sure to compare chosen artists to each other. I will try to get past my concerns and borrow from other artists using them as inspiration to help create my own pieces of work”.
The content of the glossary of terms is – I think – cut and pasted from the MoMA site. I know that you have credited MoMA at the foot of the glossary, but you need to demonstrate that you understand the terms. To demonstrate that you understand the terms, add some of your own texts along with relevant images to show that you understand the terms and can apply them, where needed, to discussions about your own work. It might also help to compare the Tate’s definitions with MoMAs to see if they match up.
“I will change the glossary of terms so that it reflects my own understanding”.
Learning Logs or Blogs/Critical essays
Context, reflective thinking, critical thinking, analysis
The learning log is improving. You write clearly about what you’re doing. Analyse the results of your layouts more. Be more critical about success and failure and always link to the work of others. The text for the Critical Review is, at the moment, very brief. The question (‘Is there a connection between Harold Gilman and Edouard Vuillard in the way they paint their interiors?’) is a bit simplistic as you could end up saying ‘yes’ or ‘no’. Rewrite the title so that it allows you to explore how they might be connected. Find some published texts (not internet sources) that will help you. Make sure you define the key terms. Don’t waste much time on their biographies. Only include what is absolutely relevant to your enquiry.
” I will be more critical when it comes to success and failures, linking my work to others also. I will also redo the title to my critical review to come up with something that is a more complex question therefore needing a more complex answer. I will try to find books on the chosen artists if this is possible and I will try not to go into too much depth regarding biographies.”
Suggested reading/viewing
Context
There are a few references from previous reports you have yet to pursue. Take time to
address this and to reflect on them and how they might inform your work, especially in the Parallel Project. Also, go through the reading list and pull out a few artists and idea that excite you. Think about the domestic when looking for influences.
“I will reread previous reports to see what I have missed and work on them”.
Pointers for the next assignment
● Reflect on this feedback in your learning log.
● Follow up on the suggestions I have made.
● Keep making lots of work.
● You can consider your home the ‘environment’ if that helps, but do try and approach
making and showing the work in ways that are new to you. Don’t just make drawings
of your home. Be bold.
Well done, I look forward to your next assignment.
Tutor name Bryan Eccleshall
Date 21/7/19
Next assignment due 25/10/19
Notes of Feedback.
Response to notes.
- Have reflected on my feedback.
- Have redone the shadows on my chair drawing for “Experimenting with mark-making”.
- Completed research on Matisse’s use of 2 meter long brushes.
- I have updated my glossary of terms so that it is in my own words.
- Have done mark making practice using different mediums, twisting my wrists, arms and elbows so see what effect they gave as well as applying the mediums to create soft, hard, thin, thick, slow, fast marks.
- Have completed further work on assignment using these techniques and have made a video doing so.
- I have reflected on this process: lines match melody, reason for colour choice, rhythm and movement and documentation of performance.
- Have revisited: https://www.oca.ac.uk/weareoca/creative-writing/life-one/ to remind myself of these points;- “In summary here are a few helpful points which I have unearthed:
1. Listen to my tutor.
2. Accept criticism and actively learn from it.
3. Explore scale.
4. Take risks.
5. Take charge of own learning.
6. Keep reflecting over past mistakes and yes, learn from them. Don’t let them go to waste!
7. Convey a sense of clarity through each assignment.
8. Don’t let professional presentation of outcomes deflect from personal voice.
9. Draw, sketch, plan….dont forget to investigate styles and unusual methods!
10. As Karen Nicol (designer) told me when I interviewed her recently: Be “irreverent” with textiles, disrespect known uses for materials and use then to our whim, our way.”